tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-759789976253980784.post8115906386467064800..comments2023-10-25T04:48:34.609-04:00Comments on Claudie A.: DOOM Is Upon MeClaudie A.http://www.blogger.com/profile/10726598163986994132noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-759789976253980784.post-65574044145779947012011-06-24T10:43:30.778-04:002011-06-24T10:43:30.778-04:00I liked it. The more I learn about White Echoes, t...I liked it. The more I learn about White Echoes, the more I want to read it.cookiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05188576122682176946noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-759789976253980784.post-68060818237621243612011-06-21T20:25:20.514-04:002011-06-21T20:25:20.514-04:00SB: Wow, thanks for the feedback! :) This is all f...SB: Wow, thanks for the feedback! :) This is all first-draft level, but you can bet I have your comment noted down in my document. <br /><br />Margo: I'm still wondering why you thought of me. Do I sound that bloodthirsty? XDClaudie A.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10726598163986994132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-759789976253980784.post-67846910672105817262011-06-21T10:31:12.949-04:002011-06-21T10:31:12.949-04:00Oooh, an assassination. I knew you had the bloodl...Oooh, an assassination. I knew you had the bloodlust in you!Margo Lerwillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00773653995392669855noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-759789976253980784.post-857451295799943752011-06-21T06:30:16.625-04:002011-06-21T06:30:16.625-04:00I like the slow buildup you have going. Perhaps a ...I like the slow buildup you have going. Perhaps a bit more sensory information and insight into the character's emotional state (is his heart beating quickly? Does he feel clammy?) would take it from 'good' to 'amazing'.S.B. Stewart-Lainghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03134867428280114360noreply@blogger.com